Sunday Six #2 Midnight Bandit

Happy Sunday! Sorry if that’s far too cheerful, but I completed a novel on Saturday and I’m feeling rather ecstatic about that. Thanks to everyone who dropped by last week. Such a great response to this WIP. Since I’m still writing it I hope you’ll enjoy what’s to come as much as me. So, continuing from last week, I’m offering up the next six sentences.

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Jeremy gripped the reins in one hand and gestured his four companions forward until they reached the limit of the trees. At his signal the other riders kicked their mounts forward, aiming directly for the swiftly moving carriage with the intention of halting it as smoothly as possible. They couldn’t risk having their precious cargo thrown about or give the grooms time to get a shot off that could injure one of them. After the trouble he’d gone to in his quest to finally be in the right place at the right time, he couldnโ€™t let this opportunity be lost to carelessness.

He rose up in his stirrups, watching his men with a certain stirring of pride and sting of guilt that he’d turned them into bandits of the night. But to restore the fortunes of a once proud and noble family, they were all prepared to be just a little bit wild.

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Karysa Faire
8 years ago

Love this line: “. . . watching his men with a certain stirring of pride and sting of guilt”. The whole snippet is smooth and beautifully told. I could visualize the scene clearly.

Sue
Sue
8 years ago

Looking forward to the back story on why the need to be wild, nicely put. Your writing is like a painting very visual
(I’m posted this week on WWW, hope you join us)

Virginia Kelly
8 years ago

I love regency romance, love the premise here. Very well done!

Caught a typo: in “heโ€™d turned his them into bandits of the night” delete “his”

Joanne Stewart
8 years ago

I love that you’ve given him a cause we don’t hate him for. He’s not a bandit, just to be one, but because he’s got a noble cause, which almost makes me root for him. I’m also curious as to what the cargo is. Terrific snippet.

brendaashworthbarry
8 years ago

Nice job. I loved that he is saving the family fortune and being a little wild. Loved the hook and can’t wait to read more. ๐Ÿ™‚

Siobhan Muir
8 years ago

Great set up, Heather. Now to see if he goes more than he bargained for. ๐Ÿ˜‰

Elin Gregory
8 years ago

Congratulations!! And thanks for an exciting snippet. I love the idea of being ‘a little bit wild’.

Zee Monodee
8 years ago

You totally brought me into the moment. And congrats on completing the novel ๐Ÿ™‚

Joyce Scarbrough
8 years ago

Good snippet for stirring our curiosity. Hope you continue with more from this next week!

Paula Martin
8 years ago

Excellent six, great description, and of course the interesting bit – what or who is the precious cargo?

sarahballance
8 years ago

Great descriptions, and I love his closing thought!

Sherry Gloag
8 years ago

I agree, a very vivid scene, and what is that precoius cargo?

Gem Sivad
8 years ago

I like this very much. The promise of saving the family fortune, precious cargo, great friends on the quest…wow!

Stevie Carroll
8 years ago

I’m intrigued as to the cargo now. A nicely atmospheric excerpt.

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