Sunday Six #1 Midnight Bandit

Six Sentence Sunday might have ended last week but here I am again, dishing up six sentences of a work in progress. This one is brand new and may not necessarily end up a romance but the character is (or will be) tied to a future regency romance series.

***

Moonlight and shadow danced across the valley floor below, making the quiet night at once sinister and exciting with the prospect of salvation. Captain Jeremy North adjusted his seat on an equally dark gelding and waited with his men for the perfect moment to arrive.

Far below, a coach pulled by four white horses snaked along the valley floor with no idea they were being watched, bound for a wealthy man’s lands and a week long frivolous house party. Jeremy’s invitation had not arrived, and he feared word had reached the hostess’ of the dire straights he’d fallen into. They couldn’t know he had a spectacularly brilliant plan to get out of the mess he’d inherited. It merely required bravery, a little midnight thievery, and a daring plan to accomplish the recovery of his pride and the salvation of his lands.

***

Thanks for reading!

20 Comments
Newest
Oldest Most Voted
Inline Feedbacks
View all comments
Elin Gregory
8 years ago

Oh brilliant. Actually you had me at “Mignght Bandit” – I’m so easy that’s all it took – but I have a very soft spot for highwaymen. Especially the non-romantic kind.

JoAnne Kenrick
8 years ago

fab imagery…and that first sentence really drew me in.

Kate Warren
8 years ago

Intriguing! I must read this story when it is finished! Love the hero’s name. Reminds me of Jeremy Northam, the best Mr. Knightley ever. πŸ™‚

kelworthfiles
8 years ago

Yay for midnight thievery and daring plans! Thanks for sharing.

One nitpick – why is there an apostrophe after hostess? If it was supposed to be possessive, then we’re missing the possessed noun. (hostess’ ears?)

FCEtier
8 years ago

You really did a number on the old “dark and stormy night” thing!
Great snippet!

Joanne Stewart
8 years ago

Wow. That sounds like an excellent opening. I agree–I’m hooked!

brendaashworthbarry
8 years ago

What a hook and very intriguing. Can’t wait to read more. πŸ™‚

laurakayeauthor
laurakayeauthor
8 years ago

Great set-up!

veronicascott
8 years ago

This is highly intriguing and promising and I’m dying to read more! Terrific excerpt!

Stevie Carroll
8 years ago

I’m intrigued and leen to read more already.

Sue
Sue
8 years ago

Ohhh Heather, the imagery the character. I’m really annoyed it’s only six sentences.. By the way I’ve posted something today also πŸ˜€

Gem Sivad
8 years ago

He’s audacious and determined, the setting is fantastic–I’m hooked.

Taryn Kincaid
8 years ago

Oh! Hope Jeremy has decided to play at being a highwayman! Love highwaymen~

Jess Schira
8 years ago

I love the imagery.

Dani-Lyn Alexander
8 years ago

What a wonderful set up, I can’t wait to read more!

Karysa Faire
8 years ago

Fantastic set-up. It pulled me right in.

Karen Michelle Nutt
8 years ago

Nice set up! I’m intrigued to know more.

Zee Monodee
8 years ago

Oh, he is bold and daring! Perfect hero material. πŸ™‚ Also, loved the first sentence!

sarahballance
8 years ago

You’ve done a great job of pulling me into this story. I SO feel this character and this scene!