#SixSunday 41 In Her Image

Hello everyone. Christmas is just a few days away so Merry Christmas. Hope you have a good one. I’m continuing with In Her Image and the next black cloud to ruin Doris’ day has just arrived.

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She knew what loss felt like and had no wish to reacquaint herself with those gnawing sensations. Alone was better. It hurt less. There was nothing so wretched as to pretend that your heart wasn’t breaking before a strangers’ gaze.

She scanned the park, looking for another scene to hold her attention. Marcel was still out of sight, but a broad figure strutted along the path in her direction, his belly swinging slightly with each step.

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Jessica Subject
Jessica Subject
8 years ago

Wonderful description, and great insight into your MC! 🙂

Karen Michelle Nutt
Karen Michelle Nutt
8 years ago

Wonderful and sad. Great descriptions here.

Sue
Sue
8 years ago

Better to be alone, nice inner monologue but the man strutting lol toward her sounds unattractive

Gemma Parkes
8 years ago

I love the set up here, understanding her emotion and then wondering who this new character is…

Taryn Kincaid
8 years ago

Good illumination of Doris’ character. And that swinging belly image will stay with me!

Ceri Hebert
8 years ago

That last line was fantastic! I can see it vividly. Very well done six!

paulinewiles
8 years ago

I’m new here but I love the “There was nothing so wretched…” sentence. And I definitely want to know who the broad person with the belly is.

Elin Gregory
8 years ago

Lovely descriptive six.

Merry Christmas to you and yours. I hope you have a brilliant time.

Sandra Sookoo
8 years ago

I can totally see that man coming toward her. Nice job!

Stevie Carroll
8 years ago

An ominous second paragraph there.

SE Gilchrist
8 years ago

I cant help feeling trouble is on its way. Love the description of the newcomer!

Lorraine Paton
8 years ago

Uh oh – this new arrival doesn’t sound nice. But, I guess, he is a distraction…

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