#SixSunday 40 – In Her Image

Hey there. Welcome to my blog. I really appreciate everyone who reads and comments each week, and those visiting my blog for the first time. If you’re new, each Sunday a great bunch of writers publish a short six sentence excerpt from a work in progress or a published story. You will find amazing authors participating in Six Sunday by visiting the host site, Six Sentence Sunday and by searching for #SixSunday via Twitter.

This week I’m continuing with six from In Her Image, my newsletter serialized story.

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The man hunkered down to the child’s level and he appeared to be speaking earnestly. Surprised by his patience and calm approach, Doris sat forward, wishing she could hear the exchange. The little girls head dropped low, possibly at a rebuke, but the man chucked her under the chin to raise her face and she smiled again.

A pretty blonde infant wrapped in lavender cotton and fine lace.

It was then Doris noticed the whole family was clothed in varying degrees of mourning colors: somber lavender and grey for the girls, seriously dark for the boys. Feeling uncomfortably aware that she might be spying on a grief stricken family engaged in a brief moment of levity, she looked down.

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Lorraine Paton
8 years ago

Heather, I love how engaged she is with their activities and now their circumstance. Even though they are strangers, she empathizes. Amazing how much one can discover just by observing.

Stevie Carroll
8 years ago

A lovely and intriguing scene there.

Kate Warren
8 years ago

That was beautiful.

Gemma Parkes
8 years ago

Excellent imagery! Just brilliant.

Angela Quarles
8 years ago

What a great scene, I could totally see the interaction and you painted such a poignant moment, especially when she realizes what’s going on…

Sue
Sue
8 years ago

Such a poetic snippet. We learn so much yet I want more

Jessica Subject
Jessica Subject
8 years ago

Wow, I felt like I was right there. Well done!

Karen Michelle Nutt
8 years ago

A touching scene. I want to read more. 🙂

Taryn Kincaid
8 years ago

Very touching.

veronicascott
8 years ago

Very interesting situation, so well described. Can’t wait to read more – terrific six!

Donna Cummings
8 years ago

This is lovely. I like seeing the situation through her eyes, speculating with her as to what’s happening. 🙂

gzidar
8 years ago

You handled Doris’ moment of awkwardness beautifully.

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